sometimes, aurelie tries her hand at fashion photography.
i'm not at all sure how i feel about this one.
thoughts?

Vague thought: Perhaps the lipstick could be a little richer and more prominent?

The upper lip could be better defined somehow (I guess play with it in Photoshop). Her cheek is a bit washed out. If you're going for the washed out look, I'd try to make the rest of her skin match that a little more. I feel like there's something a little strange about the angle of the shot but can't really figure out what. Also, were you to do it again, I'd suggest having her hair less neat and tidy, and more flowy/messy.

Her left shoulder looks bruised and beaten. I might also try different crops, like just cutting that part of her body out and making the focus her face and hair.

The light is a little harsh, I find myself really distracted by the shadow near the neck and from the sunglasses. I would also suggest playing around with the angel a bit more, I'm not trying to say its awkward or anything, but I do think you could get a more flattering angle. Maybe try it with her hair down?

Posted by argonian Her left shoulder looks bruised and beaten. I might also try different crops, like just cutting that part of her body out and making the focus her face and hair.

I have to agree with argonian here. Her shoulder is the first thing that caught my attention and pretty much kept it.

Except that I don't know my left from right.

I tried cropping it and couldn't come up with a good crop, but it did make me realize that the shadow under her left shoulder is too harsh for my liking. I didn't really notice it before

I agree the shoulder catches the eye and is distracting. The lighting looks like harsh direct sunlight and is creating some hot spots while other areas are more nicely lit, like the right side and top of her face.

With something like this I would definitely use something to block the direct sunlight so that the lighting is softer and more flattering.

The angle and sunglasses don't really add anything for me either, but the biggest issue is just the lighting. If I am forced to shoot people outdoors (I don't generally care to) the best (and easiest) lighting is usually on overcast days or in the shade.

Posted by profoundunderground I would also suggest playing around with the angel a bit more,

Agreed, play more with the angel Srysly though, there's a disturbing feel and tension in the photo, in a good way. She doesn't look too comfortable, yet not in pain, the bruising color suggests foul play, the images in the glasses add to the mystery, and look awkward when viewed from the angle you've posted.

It's worth shooting a minimum of ten shots of a situation like this, even ten of the crop you have chosen. And some full or more body, different POV. Maybe stand over her if you want the dominating look. The semi out of focus bg adds to the tension here. Normally I would suggest either more out of focus, or sharp, but here your breaking the 'rules' works. Bounce cards will give you more light control.

This photo inspires questions, seems like a film still. Definitely some Laura Palmer Twin Peaks vibe happening. Would be fun to see more, nice work.